(In which I write a few too many uptight paragraphs about journalistic style on the internet, in the form of a “Letter to the Editor”—which I will ironically post on my blog, but never send.)
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Dear Breaking News Alert editors at the New York Times,
When did you start being so colloquial? Over the past several days, I’ve noticed quite a bit of inconsistency in your tone—far more casual in some cases than it ever used to be.
Earlier this evening, for example, while informing me via email about Francisco Rodriguez’s altercation with his father-in-law, you mentioned that it resulted in “a ton of bad publicity” for the Mets. A ton? Like two-thousand pounds of negative press?
I don’t think that all the bits in all the bytes of all the press he received since last night would amount to even half of that. Using “ton” in this sense is pretty informal and colloquial (depending on your dictionary) for a publication whose standards editor prohibits common-use neologisms like “tweet,” don’t you think?
Honestly, I wouldn’t have said anything, if yesterday you hadn’t fudged another Breaking News Alert on something arguably more important. At 8:49 p.m., reporting on China’s “spectacular growth” in the second fiscal quarter, you wrote the following (emphasis mine):
The milestone, though anticipated for some time, is the most striking evidence yet that China’s ascendance is for real and that the rest of the world will have to reckon with a new economic superpower.
What! What do you mean China’s rise to power is “for real”? Of course China is becoming a substantial economic force. So just say that instead.
I’m not disillusioned yet; and I still love you, Gray Lady. I understand that most of this text is taken verbatim from the opening paragraphs of the breaking articles themselves. However, your job is to edit the news for an audience who appreciates straightforward language and uncluttered facts. Or we’ll take matters into our own hands.
A little more substance and a little less sensationalism is welcome in a time when newspapers can become the sources of record on the internet, too. After all, just because it’s not on paper doesn’t mean it can sound like Tumblr.
Sincerely yours,
Trevor Filter